Post your Dom3 Haiku

[lch]

Kamamura said:
I would like to remind (especially the founder of the thread), that to qualify as a haiku, you must at least conform to the 5/7/5 syllable structure.

Only if you're following Kyoshi's "traditional" movement. The syllables are formed differently than in Japanese, anyway, so even adhering to the 5-7-5 structure doesn't guarantee a good rythm. If you keep it short, that should be sufficient.

[Saxon]

The fearsome SC
The pride of high protection
The AN death bless

Hmm, the abbreviations do not help the poetry, will work on this more. The syllable's work, but the letters instead of words take away the grace of the poem.

[VedalkenBear]

I think a _much_ better exercise would be to do a renga, but I'm not sure if anyone else even knows what that is.

The Japanese restriction should be adhered to as much as possible, IMO. But then, if you do, you come out with something _extremely_ short (cf. my haiku).

[lch]

VedalkenBear said:
I think a _much_ better exercise would be to do a renga, but I'm not sure if anyone else even knows what that is.

You need two people for that, first of all.

[vfb]

It's a little like this, isn't it? Except, not funny.

http://fromearth.net/LetsPlay/Boatmurdered/

[Saxon]

Waiting for the turn,
the unknowns of combat weigh
on my nervous heart.

[Jazzepi]

This is for fun
Worry about restrictions
All fun is lost

Jazzepi

[VedalkenBear]

Ich: I believe the traditional number for doing a renga was 3. At least, all of the renga that I had to read were done by three different poets. Considering the format we have here, we have at least... what, 10 different people? It seems quite doable.

Jazzepi: Restrictions are what makes poetry poetry.

[Morkilus]

Mad art without form
Chaotic dreams from R'lyeh
May still be pretty

[VedalkenBear]

Ermor's legions rise
from the same bed as flowers;
life and death the same?